maybe you should work about the parting? instead of "i'd like to make myself believe. that" (next page) "planet earth turns slowly" maybe you can put "that" with ""planet earth.." i'm sure it'll be nicer
lol, let me see if i have the base for it, thanks for catching that (these take me quite a while to do and after about an hour and a half of sitting there i get lazy and want it over with)
and this is one of my fav song by him....